translation shifts : Timun Mas

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TIMUN EMAS

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One night, while they were praying, Buto Ijo a giant with supranatural powers passed their house. He heard they pray. “Don’t worry farmers. I can give you a child. But you have to give me that child when she is 17 years old,” said Buto Ijo. The farmers were so happy. They did not think about the risk of losing their child later and agree to take the offer. Later, Buto Ijo gave them a bunch of cucumber seeds. The farmers planted them carefully. Then the seeds changed into plants. No longer after that, a big golden cucumber grew from plants. After it had ripe, the farmers picked and cut it. They were very surprised to see beautiful girl inside the cucumber. They named her Timun Mas or Golden Cucumber. Years passed by and Timun Mas has changed into a beautiful girl. On her 17th birthday, Timun Mas was very happy.

However, the parents were very sad. They knew they had to keep their promise to Buto Ijo the giant but they also did not want to lose their beloved daughter. “My daughter, take this bag. It can save you from the giant,” said father. “What do you mean, Father? I don’t understand,” said Timun Mas.

Right after that, Buto Ijo came into their house. “Run Timun Mas. Save your life!” said the mother. Buto ijo was angry. He knew the farmers wanted to break their promise. He chased Timun Mas away. Buto Ijo was getting closer and closer. Timun Mas then opened the bag and threw a handful of salt. It became sea. Buto Ijo had to swim to cross the sea. Later, Timun Mas threw some chilly. It became a jungle with trees. The trees had sharp thorns so they hurt Buto Ijo. However, he was still able to chase Timun Mas. Timun Mas took her third magic stuff. It was cucumber seeds. She threw them and became cucumber field. But Buto Ijo still could escape from the field. Then it was the last magic stuff she had in the bag. It was a shrimp paste or terasi. She threw it and became a big swamp. Buto Ijo was still trying to swim the swamp but he was very tired. Then he was drowning and died.

Timun Mas then immediately went home. The farmers were so happy that they finally together again.

No	SOURCE LANGUAGE	TARGET LANGUAGE	TRANSLATION SHIFTS
			Level Shifts	Unit Shifts	Structure Shifts	Class Shifts	Intra-system Shifts
1	One night, while they were praying, Buto Ijo a giant with supranatural powers passed their house.	Suatu malam, ketika mereka sedang berdoa, Buto Ijo seorang raksasa yang memiliki kesaktian melewati rumah mereka.	ketika mereka sedang berdoa>while they were praying	kesaktian> supranatural power
2	He heard they pray.	Dia mendengar mereka berdoa.
3	“Don’t worry farmers.	Jangan kuatir petani.					Petani> Farmers
4	I can give you a child.	Saya dapat memberimu seorang anak		memberimu>give you
5	But you have to give me that child when she is 17 years old,” said Buto Ijo	Tapi kau harus menyerahkan anak itu kepadaku ketika dia berusia 17 tahun," kata Buto Ijo		harus>have to; tahun>years old
6	The farmers were so happy.	Petani sangat bahagia.					petani> farmers
7	They did not think about the risk of losing their child later and agree to take the offer.	Mereka tidak memikirkan tentang resiko  kehilangan anak mereka nantinya dan menyetujui tawaran tersebut,		tawaran>the offer; agree to take> menyetujui
8	Later, Buto Ijo gave them a bunch of cucumber seeds.	Kemudian, Buto Ijo memberi mereka segenggam benih mentimun.			benih mentimun> cucumber seeds		benih>seeds
9	The farmers planted them carefully.	Petani menanamnya dengan hati-hati.		dengan hati-hati> carefully menanamnya> planted them			petani> farmers
10	Then the seeds changed into plants.	Kemudian benih itu tumbuh menjadi tanaman.					benih>seeds; tanaman> plants
11	No longer after that, a big golden cucumber grew from plants.	Tidak lama setelah itu, sebuah timun emas yang besar tumbuh dari tanaman itu.			sebuah timun emas yang besar> a big golden cucumber		tanaman> plants
12	After it had ripe, the farmers picked and cut it.	Setelah buah itu ranum, petani  memetik dan membelahnya		it>buah itu; membelahnya>cut it			petani> farmers
13	They were very surprised to see beautiful girl inside the cucumber.	Mereka sangat terkejut melihat anak perempuan cantik didalam mentimun itu	mereka sangat terkejut> mereka sangat terkejut	melihat>to see	anak perempuan cantik>beautiful girl
14	They named her Timun Mas or Golden Cucumber.	Mereka menamainya Timun Mas.		menamainya>named her
15	Years passed by and Timun Mas has changed into a beautiful girl.	Bertahun-tahun telah dilewati dan timun mas bertumbuh menjadi seorang gadis yang cantik		bertahun-tahun>years	seorang gadis yang cantik> a beautiful girl
16	On her 17th birthday, Timun Mas was very happy.	Di hari ulangtahunnya yang ketujuh belas, timun mas sangat bahagia	Timun mas sangat bahagia>Timun mas was very happy
17	However, the parents were very sad.	Namun, orangtuanya sangat sedih		orangtuanya>the parents			orangtuanya> the parents
18	They knew they had to keep their promise to Buto Ijo the giant but they also did not want to lose their beloved daughter.	Mereka tahu bahwa mereka harus menepati janji kepada raksasa Buto Ijo tapi mereka juga tidak ingin kehilangan anak yang mereka sayangi.		harus>had to; kehilangan>to lose	Raksasa Buto Ijo>Buto Ijo the giant; anak yang mereka sayangi>their beloved daughter